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Who am I?
Do you know?
Every second that I grow
But who am I?
My world keeps spinning
And I keep on winning
But still who am I?
Why am I here?
Why must everybody near shed at least one tear?
I have to set my life on gear
So nobody will have to live in fear
But first who am I?
Does anyone know?
©2008-2009 ~lamadeline9
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I made up this poem in 20 freekin minutes

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:iconartistichobbit:
its good but. it does'nt flow right i don't know how to say this right to be honest. I like way you wrote it and all but something does not flow right maybe its the words or the ryhming i have no idea.

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:iconlamadeline9:
I know I like it but something something dosent feel right about it

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My biggest sister is the greatest writer on earth....At least that's what I think. :iconJohnnie-History:
:iconartistichobbit:
i know cant quite figure it out it will coem to us eventually thansk for the friend watch

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:iconlamadeline9:
Welcome

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My biggest sister is the greatest writer on earth....At least that's what I think. :iconJohnnie-History:
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I like it. ^^ You'll get better!

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"...In this game, Johnnie~Girl, you'll find that what you know may get you killed, and who you know may not always save your life..." ~Samuel Thompson, exerpt from "Uh~Oh, Here We Go" (c) Melissa Robb

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